Good story line and I did like the characters but I was confused in the timeline. They lived in a way that seemed centuries ago but had current century knowledge. There were a-lot of grammatical errors, missing words or sentences, words put in the wrong places or not deleted when fixed. There was an incredible amount of inner dialog which I usually don’t mind but I didn’t feel it was necessary since it was repetitive. Needed more dialog between characters and there were definitely some things I felt could have been added but got left out. This story has so much potential, just needs some tweaks otherwise it was enjoyable.