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A review by coralrose
A Beautiful Composition of Broken by r.h. Sin
3.0
I waffled a lot on this one, between 3 and 2.
TL;DR - strongest when speaking from his own pain rather than for another gender.
Some really poignant and pointed poems, short and sweet. As in:
potion.
she refused to be anyone's cup of tea
she was more so the finest glasses of whiskey
He writes spot on of pain and broken relationships.
Weaknesses:
Needed stronger editing. A couple times a poem was just a couple lines off of an earlier poem, would have been strengthened by placing them right after each other or eliminating one. In general it felt repetitive.
Finally, he speaks FOR women a couple of times in ways that just rubbed me wrong. The tone of "Now let me tell you how to appreciate a strong woman.." just could have done without.
As in:
kingless.
she's single
which makes her
a kingless queen
and that's okay
Um...nope. She's not "less" anything. She's complete as she is.
TL;DR - strongest when speaking from his own pain rather than for another gender.
Some really poignant and pointed poems, short and sweet. As in:
potion.
she refused to be anyone's cup of tea
she was more so the finest glasses of whiskey
He writes spot on of pain and broken relationships.
Weaknesses:
Needed stronger editing. A couple times a poem was just a couple lines off of an earlier poem, would have been strengthened by placing them right after each other or eliminating one. In general it felt repetitive.
Finally, he speaks FOR women a couple of times in ways that just rubbed me wrong. The tone of "Now let me tell you how to appreciate a strong woman.." just could have done without.
As in:
kingless.
she's single
which makes her
a kingless queen
and that's okay
Um...nope. She's not "less" anything. She's complete as she is.